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She plays the piano
Just like an angel
Taking strides of her own

With folded wings
Clasped about her skin
As fingers intertwine
And hands do not rest,
But instead move

Across the keys
Unlocking the doors
Of a child's heart
As she sways
Into the Movements
Of a woman

The intensity of
Eyes permeates the air
Even as they are
Lowered

To the stepping stones
Where raindrops wept
A million tears
Creating Oceans
That spanned across
The sands
And forever flow

No matter how torrent
Or impalpable
She eases into that
Steady Motion

As her vessel
Gently rocks
The sunsets

Until the door is closed
And the song has
Ended, and an easy
Voice, is able to
Explain

Exactly what was seen
What was meant
In the Depths
Of her Ocean.
and that is all that matters.

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Note: This beautiful artist is what inspired me to write this: www.youtube.com/watch?v=rmyC5F… :heart:

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I absolutely love this, the flow and the image that your words create is true beauty. The way you describe the feeling as she plays and how the music affects everything is brilliantly written out in such a romantic poem and if I were in that world while she played I would never leave, I would let the music carry me as she seemed to do as well.

I never noticed any grammar issues or anything so it's very carefully written out and revised, I would give more then 5 stars on impact if I could cause judging by the comments it impacted people the same it did me.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
Hey there I featured this piece here and just thought I'd let you know.

Thanks!
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Student Writer
:love: It's just... the way you wrote it feels like fingers playing smoothly across a keyboard, like that's how it should be read, with a melody playing behind it.
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KodokuNoNana Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012   General Artist
This one is absolutely gorgeous!
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starell Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012
I absolutely adore your poem! It is so simple, but with such gorgeously evocative language!
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