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your soul is an acoustic
black and white picture
movie reel
captive sunlight
never yielding to release
giving shadows a new taste
of elegance, quiescent
the tranquil luminescence
that can trap a heart
in the photographic emulsion
or celluloid undertow
of slow motion
just as flammable
as a subtle combustion
kindling a rustic tongue
to move a languid expulsion
ladened with sorrows
carried like crystal shards
in a humble sun catcher
hung above a familiar window
prizing inconsequential matter
into flecks of golden dust
reminiscent of
beauty and
:sun: :music: Music video I was watching when I got the idea to write this: [link]

Update 12/12/12... Oh my that's alot of 12's! My second DLD Feature! [link] :iconlawooplz:
:icondailylitdeviations: Thank you so much!
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acoustic is, for me, a definite inclusion in my list of up and coming works. Well done, I feel proud reading this.

Its soft, its subtle, its poignant, and the best part is.... Its lukewarm; its like someone has a guitar banging in the back of the room, there's turmoil and personal grudges pouring out, while the man is making sense out of this madness - and doing it like a man, at that.

This is inspiring stuff, and no doubt will remain one of those critiques I haply look forward to reconsidering every time I read this work. Well done!
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TheEmptyChest Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014
The words you use look so beautiful together: tranquil luminescence, subtle combustion, anguid expulsion... 

autumnlit Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2014
Thank you!
Beautiful work! I love the language and the imagery especially!
autumnlit Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2014
Thank you very much =)
Januairie Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist

Congratulations on the DLD! :huggle:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012   General Artist
Eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee! :love: A DLD for you the following day! :heart: :heart: :heart:
Congratulations, sweetheart! You already know how much I adore this piece! :tighthug:
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by =DailyLitDeviations in a news article that can be found here: [link]

Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article. Keep writing and keep creating.
Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012   General Artist
The rhyme here is quite precious and the imagery incredible. Keep up the excellent, excellent poetry you pretty, pretty soul! :huggle:
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TotallyUncreativeMe Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You have such a beautiful way with words
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
How incredibly beautiful! :heart:
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erato11 Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2012
Wow. Very moving.
Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2012  Student Writer
I adore the imagery! It's so beautiful...
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singagainsoon Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is amazing! Excellent work<3
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